First Essay

Okay, I'm not gonna lie, this was a little harder for me to write than I thought. I chose to write option #5 from Sobchack's article; it was about comparing what she said to the movie Boyz N The Hood. First off, I've never really seen the movie (well, I've seen it now, but not before I wrote the first draft). I've watched clips here and there and I knew the concept, but I hadn"t actually sat down and watched it. Something I have trouble with is too much summarization. I had looked up clips from the movie and I ended up just describing what I saw. I didn't prove my point enough on how the violence in the movie is made to seem more real than in other movies like Pulp Fiction. I wanted to say that Sobchack can't generalize all the movies of the 80's and 90's. The draft workshop helped a lot because my group gave me great ideas of how to improve my writing without making me feel really dumb (I forgot to mention that I'm really insecure about my writing, so I felt better when my group made me feel comfortable). Anyways, I really like the workshop and I think I can make my paper a lot better. I'm shootin' for a B, we'll see.